LLL Season 11: Week 6
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Drop by Midnight Friday (Eastern Time)
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Vote on 5 Battles
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LLL Season 11: Week 6
Standard Rules (found in LLL Office)
Check in by Wednesday
Drop by Midnight Friday (Eastern Time)
16 Lines Minimum
Vote on 5 Battles
MUST LEAVE LINKS in your check in, or lose 2 votes per missing link
Good Luck
Last edited by Rant; August 15th, 2009 at 12:33 AM
A.rtificial I.ntelligence
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Last edited by $criptures; August 14th, 2009 at 04:58 PM
your almighty metafo?
lmao...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...fo#post6993835
it's faster when we get to scrappin, n fagot you'll never get close to the belt...
'cause this a massacre waiting to happen, and then fucking vote for himself.
bitch i boast cause im felt, and all you do is get hated on by most of the league..
we all know scrip sucks, and consensus verses getting worse & worse by the week
but a beast? are you serious? i'll cut you up like the razor you used on your arms
but i've set a new fine line, that seems to fit in perfectly there with your scars..
it's ME in charge...you suck, expect rewards to be mine from the matches purse's
bitch i could waste your ass, but you already take care of that with your verses.
your whackness is splurgin. and for that, i'll beat you like i'm drunken son
'cause i herd ya metafo...and the chances are you lost to every one of 'em
quit stuntin bum, we got the real whack kinds and then the powerful
while you run in the middle of the league... and can bet we'll beat the shit outta you
i'm sick of your shit. everyone knows i ball, i dunk that shit like a soldier
while if we see scrip in the lane, it's easier to hit 4-wheel drive n run his ass over
my raps colder...your shits older, none of us can think of a reason why your great
bitch you've never been comp., unless of course i've had your ass in hibernate.
16.
A.rtificial I.ntelligence
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php/scriptures-vs-king-403462/index.html?t=403462
Round 2....FIGHT!
He claims he builds titanic verses, but can barely stay afloat in this rap league
Plus how is that^ possible?! Dude, we all Noah Arc stomped you last week
Bitches tend to ignore him to lower his self esteem and leave him scarred
Cuz women would rather go back to Venus in order to avoid seeing Mars
Women hate em, even gay men tend to stay away from this fag’s bed
But dudes would fight over u…if u post after Ras and Hex in the chat thread
I don’t jus call him gay for kicks, I dug up plenty dirt that’ll prove it’s true
Who shows his ass…literally…in a pic forum…that seems to be full of dudes?!
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...176/index.html (damn, he deleted the pic tho, lol!)
You changed ya name from Ancel to Mars so you could chill amongst us stars
But your ass was grass after Arch killed u, so now i get to “Stomp the Yard”
Mars everyone beats you, mom, dad, even ya sis gets to make some lumps
You even go to work nervous, wonderin if ur gonna get a razor bump
This rap artist is lame, shame I gotta school his ass in text proper
U’ll show strong signs of a vet…as a billboard ad painter for pet doctors
My punches will damage you fella, elbows will put u in the dirt for eons
Drop kicks will bury u, and u’ll be headin to the light once I get my neon
it's faster when we get to scrappin, n fagot you'll never get close to the belt...
'cause this a massacre waiting to happen, and then fucking vote for himself.
im not sure if the personal is true about him being almight, but if it it is this is dope
bitch i boast cause im felt, and all you do is get hated on by most of the league..
we all know scrip sucks, and consensus verses getting worse & worse by the week
very straightforward, average
but a beast? are you serious? i'll cut you up like the razor you used on your arms
but i've set a new fine line, that seems to fit in perfectly there with your scars..
aight, like the idea, i think there are ways you could have flipped it harder
it's ME in charge...you suck, expect rewards to be mine from the matches purse's
bitch i could waste your ass, but you already take care of that with your verses.
kinda played really
your whackness is splurgin. and for that, i'll beat you like i'm drunken son
'cause i herd ya metafo...and the chances are you lost to every one of 'em
not digging this nameplay that much
quit stuntin bum, we got the real whack kinds and then the powerful
while you run in the middle of the league... and can bet we'll beat the shit outta you
average i guess, kinda simple again
i'm sick of your shit. everyone knows i ball, i dunk that shit like a soldier
while if we see scrip in the lane, it's easier to hit 4-wheel drive n run his ass over
same as above, nothing outstanding or that fresh but no real problems
my raps colder...your shits older, none of us can think of a reason why your great
bitch you've never been comp., unless of course i've had your ass in hibernate.
ehhh.. maybe im missing something here
vs.
He claims he builds titanic verses, but can barely stay afloat in this rap league
Plus how is that^ possible?! Dude, we all Noah Arc stomped you last week
i liked the idea, setup has room for improvement, right now the wp isn't fully anchored, so to speak
Bitches tend to ignore him to lower his self esteem and leave him scarred
Cuz women would rather go back to Venus in order to avoid seeing Mars
mehh, this was corny to me
Women hate em, even gay men tend to stay away from this fag’s bed
But dudes would fight over u…if u post after Ras and Hex in the chat thread
i liked the idea here, thought u could have flipped it better for example, instead of making it an insult about guys not liking him just say something like
only time bitches would fight over you is posting after ras and hex in the chat thread
more misdirection, more convetional (i.e. less homo)
I don’t jus call him gay for kicks, I dug up plenty dirt that’ll prove it’s true
Who shows his ass…literally…in a pic forum…that seems to be full of dudes?!
personal seems to be on point, without the pic its hard to say and im not reading through the whole thread
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...176/index.html (damn, he deleted the pic tho, lol!)
You changed ya name from Ancel to Mars so you could chill amongst us stars
But your ass was grass after Arch killed u, so now i get to “Stomp the Yard”
mehhh
Mars everyone beats you, mom, dad, even ya sis gets to make some lumps
You even go to work nervous, wonderin if ur gonna get a razor bump
this really didn't make a lot of sense
This rap artist is lame, shame I gotta school his ass in text proper
U’ll show strong signs of a vet…as a billboard ad painter for pet doctors
somewhat played
My punches will damage you fella, elbows will put u in the dirt for eons
Drop kicks will bury u, and u’ll be headin to the light once I get my neon
played wp and not worded great
overall scrip, a couple of punches i really liked how you were developing them, your setups tend to be a little too obvious or straightforward in some instances and lacking in others so i would focus on that, first half was also much stronger than the second which you want to be careful of because readers remember the last thing they read more strong and you don't want it to be of you fading off
this was really close, ancel's opener was huge but nothing else had the same impact, i actually think script might have more quotables even without the same amount of polish
ill come back and read this again later before voting
edit: v/ ancel, more polished throughout, scrip you just fell off hard the second part of your verse
Last edited by The Commisioner; August 16th, 2009 at 02:52 PM
it's faster when we get to scrappin, n fagot you'll never get close to the belt...
'cause this a massacre waiting to happen, and then fucking vote for himself.
cool, harsh punch.
bitch i boast cause im felt, and all you do is get hated on by most of the league..
we all know scrip sucks, and consensus verses getting worse & worse by the week
didn't like this..sorta just okish.
but a beast? are you serious? i'll cut you up like the razor you used on your arms
but i've set a new fine line, that seems to fit in perfectly there with your scars..
decent.
it's ME in charge...you suck, expect rewards to be mine from the matches purse's
bitch i could waste your ass, but you already take care of that with your verses.
alright simple, but it hit.
your whackness is splurgin. and for that, i'll beat you like i'm drunken son
'cause i herd ya metafo...and the chances are you lost to every one of 'em
cool wp..
quit stuntin bum, we got the real whack kinds and then the powerful
while you run in the middle of the league... and can bet we'll beat the shit outta you
nope.
i'm sick of your shit. everyone knows i ball, i dunk that shit like a soldier
while if we see scrip in the lane, it's easier to hit 4-wheel drive n run his ass over
ehhh
my raps colder...your shits older, none of us can think of a reason why your great
bitch you've never been comp., unless of course i've had your ass in hibernate.
ok..
He claims he builds titanic verses, but can barely stay afloat in this rap league
Plus how is that^ possible?! Dude, we all Noah Arc stomped you last week
coo personal.
Bitches tend to ignore him to lower his self esteem and leave him scarred
Cuz women would rather go back to Venus in order to avoid seeing Mars
ehhh.
Women hate em, even gay men tend to stay away from this fag’s bed
But dudes would fight over u…if u post after Ras and Hex in the chat thread
good..
I don’t jus call him gay for kicks, I dug up plenty dirt that’ll prove it’s true
Who shows his ass…literally…in a pic forum…that seems to be full of dudes?!
wording was awful, punch was meh.
You changed ya name from Ancel to Mars so you could chill amongst us stars
But your ass was grass after Arch killed u, so now i get to “Stomp the Yard”
nope.
Mars everyone beats you, mom, dad, even ya sis gets to make some lumps
You even go to work nervous, wonderin if ur gonna get a razor bump
meh..
This rap artist is lame, shame I gotta school his ass in text proper
U’ll show strong signs of a vet…as a billboard ad painter for pet doctors
played.
My punches will damage you fella, elbows will put u in the dirt for eons
Drop kicks will bury u, and u’ll be headin to the light once I get my neon
ok..
This battle was good, i felt both had their share of 2 or 3 bars that hit nicely. Also, you each had a couple played/corny lines and some bad execution. Both we're fairly consistent, but what it boils down to is Mars had 1 or 2 nicer bars from what i see. By a hair he gets this.
Vote - MARS
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it's faster when we get to scrappin, n fagot you'll never get close to the belt...
'cause this a massacre waiting to happen, and then fucking vote for himself.
cool, harsh punch.
bitch i boast cause im felt, and all you do is get hated on by most of the league..
we all know scrip sucks, and consensus verses getting worse & worse by the week
didn't like this..sorta just okish.
but a beast? are you serious? i'll cut you up like the razor you used on your arms
but i've set a new fine line, that seems to fit in perfectly there with your scars..
decent.
it's ME in charge...you suck, expect rewards to be mine from the matches purse's
bitch i could waste your ass, but you already take care of that with your verses.
alright simple, but it hit.
your whackness is splurgin. and for that, i'll beat you like i'm drunken son
'cause i herd ya metafo...and the chances are you lost to every one of 'em
cool wp..
quit stuntin bum, we got the real whack kinds and then the powerful
while you run in the middle of the league... and can bet we'll beat the shit outta you
nope.
i'm sick of your shit. everyone knows i ball, i dunk that shit like a soldier
while if we see scrip in the lane, it's easier to hit 4-wheel drive n run his ass over
ehhh
my raps colder...your shits older, none of us can think of a reason why your great
bitch you've never been comp., unless of course i've had your ass in hibernate.
ok..
He claims he builds titanic verses, but can barely stay afloat in this rap league
Plus how is that^ possible?! Dude, we all Noah Arc stomped you last week
coo personal.
Bitches tend to ignore him to lower his self esteem and leave him scarred
Cuz women would rather go back to Venus in order to avoid seeing Mars
ehhh.
Women hate em, even gay men tend to stay away from this fag’s bed
But dudes would fight over u…if u post after Ras and Hex in the chat thread
good..
I don’t jus call him gay for kicks, I dug up plenty dirt that’ll prove it’s true
Who shows his ass…literally…in a pic forum…that seems to be full of dudes?!
wording was awful, punch was meh.
You changed ya name from Ancel to Mars so you could chill amongst us stars
But your ass was grass after Arch killed u, so now i get to “Stomp the Yard”
nope.
Mars everyone beats you, mom, dad, even ya sis gets to make some lumps
You even go to work nervous, wonderin if ur gonna get a razor bump
meh..
This rap artist is lame, shame I gotta school his ass in text proper
U’ll show strong signs of a vet…as a billboard ad painter for pet doctors
played.
My punches will damage you fella, elbows will put u in the dirt for eons
Drop kicks will bury u, and u’ll be headin to the light once I get my neon
ok..
This battle was good, i felt both had their share of 2 or 3 bars that hit nicely. Also, you each had a couple played/corny lines and some bad execution. Both we're fairly consistent, but what it boils down to is Mars had 1 or 2 nicer bars from what i see. By a hair he gets this.
Vote - MARS
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it's faster when we get to scrappin, n fagot you'll never get close to the belt...
'cause this a massacre waiting to happen, and then fucking vote for himself.
bitch i boast cause im felt, and all you do is get hated on by most of the league..
we all know scrip sucks, and consensus verses getting worse & worse by the week
Vs
Women hate em, even gay men tend to stay away from this fag’s bed
But dudes would fight over u…if u post after Ras and Hex in the chat thread
My punches will damage you fella, elbows will put u in the dirt for eons
Drop kicks will bury u, and u’ll be headin to the light once I get my neon
Close battle.. both had some played concepts, like Script's "vet" shit and Mars's "Metafo" nameplay that's been used on him a couple times already.. I got it tied in quotables, but I'm gonna have to give this to Mars, because I felt that his best bars hit a little harder than Script's.. his opener probably won him this battle to be honest.. \\//ote: Mars by a cunt hair....
it's faster when we get to scrappin, n fagot you'll never get close to the belt...
'cause this a massacre waiting to happen, and then fucking vote for himself.
your whackness is splurgin. and for that, i'll beat you like i'm drunken son
'cause i herd ya metafo...and the chances are you lost to every one of 'em
VS
You changed ya name from Ancel to Mars so you could chill amongst us stars
But your ass was grass after Arch killed u, so now i get to “Stomp the Yard”
Hmm pretty cool battle actully.. script youve gotten better n i can tell your tryin.. i used a razor wordplay awhile back.. try to stay away from using link punches mid verse.. ancel came decent n i think it was enough to take this battle.
vote - ancel.
bitch i boast cause im felt, and all you do is get hated on by most of the league..
we all know scrip sucks, and consensus verses getting worse & worse by the week
your whackness is splurgin. and for that, i'll beat you like i'm drunken son
'cause i herd ya metafo...and the chances are you lost to every one of 'em
quit stuntin bum, we got the real whack kinds and then the powerful
while you run in the middle of the league... and can bet we'll beat the shit outta you
vs.
He claims he builds titanic verses, but can barely stay afloat in this rap league
Plus how is that^ possible?! Dude, we all Noah Arc stomped you last week
I don’t jus call him gay for kicks, I dug up plenty dirt that’ll prove it’s true
Who shows his ass…literally…in a pic forum…that seems to be full of dudes?!
You changed ya name from Ancel to Mars so you could chill amongst us stars
But your ass was grass after Arch killed u, so now i get to “Stomp the Yard”
Battle had its ups and downs and I got it tied in quotables, but I thought Ancel was a lil more consistent. Noah Arc line was dope tho $criptures.
Vote - Ancel
Ancel wins (3 - 2)
$criptures loses (2 - 2)