Regular Battle
Punches due NO DUE DATES
Voting ends on NO DUE DATES
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1 bar(2lines) vs 1 bar(2lines)
You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.
first to 4 wins
3-0 is a KO
Regular Battle
Punches due NO DUE DATES
Voting ends on NO DUE DATES
.
.
1 bar(2lines) vs 1 bar(2lines)
You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.
first to 4 wins
3-0 is a KO
botw
M³
Guns shoot like paparazzi.. u’ll see that flash before all else fails
Shoot up ya whip, u can Diana car fast like the princess of wales
@Jack Hallows
you thought botw meant battle of the week but in actuality, it means..
Bitch Out The Way. it’s UFC: Ur Future Champ sweeping ranks clear
so U’re F’d, C? 1-2’ll un-do u. submit, subdue u. i’m just keepin it Frank, Mir
M³
die in a car is pretty sick
i liked it
i was feelin the rhymes in jacks bar
what took away from it was the frank mir play
i seen it a few times & i dont read much on here
so im sure its been done more
i can get over that it still just dont hit all that hard
saying ur being frank aint a crazy hit
was good shit from both
winner miracle
I vote Hallows
the whole guns shoot like paparazzi's is so overplayed at this point. hallows was so poorly written though, but original
Variations of both bars before are nicely written. JH had a bit too much going on in his bar for me. Integrating UFC into your bar was a dope strategy but then you ended with the rhyme scheme Undo you, submit subdue you which felt like it was taking me in another direction. If you had chosen one or the other or had changed the wording around the results would have been menacing. As it is written the ending has such a choppy read it makes the punch less satisfying. As is i have miracle with a cleaner read.
v/miracle
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