Punches due Thursday
Voting ends on Sunday
You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.
@Fresh
Punches due Thursday
Voting ends on Sunday
You know the rules, if not, refer to the rule thread.
@Fresh
Last edited by Phalanx; November 24th, 2022 at 11:34 AM
Good luck
I'll creep w/ the chef's knife, Make sure the dweeby fucker bleeds & suffers
8 pieces when Fresh sliced after I roll on 'em w/ the blade like a pizza cutter
Here’s some food for thought; quit rapping, such a gay deplorable waste
your punches Arbitrarily... unless it’s some Random retard w/ the same horrible taste
Liked "dweeby fucker", strong insult. Chef's knife/fresh sliced was a nice extra touch. The positioning of "8 pieces" is a bit Yoda-ish but I appreciate its there to align with "I'll creep with". Similes are one of my least favourite approaches but "roll on em with the blade" & "Pizza cutter" idea was dope.
The "food for thought" & "horrible taste" shit was nice, think a bit of meat in between would've finished it off, NPI & pause if necessary. Sorry to be a cunt but arbitrarily should be arbitrary, that's minor though. "deplorable waste" is another strong insult, some strange parallels between the 2 bars. I think the closing part is where the biggest separation is, I've seen you drop better recently but in fairness Phal's name doesn't give you much to work with either.
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ths is the worst i've seen from you guys. b/c alll fresh had to do was out shine phal and didnt my vote goes to phal... no offence fresh
v- phal
aka Sorrow: the Broken Wing
Phal - Pretty cool bar. Wording was solid as per usual, the tie ins were there, fresh slice / pizza angle is solid enough for a np
Fresh - I'm honestly shocked you won last week with a hold your head high idiom concept, but man... The arbitrarily wp is fire to me... And not in a ha ha troll way, i think it's really dope and fresh... The wp is smooth, the "random" tie in was passable to bring it together. This is a good concept executed well enough
Good battle and props to both... I prefer Fresh's concept overall and it was a bit more enjoyable for me conceptually
Don't think I've voted against Phal before on RB but Fresh gets my vote this week
"Sound stuff out guys" - Barcotic
Fresh, I read this so many times trying to make this wordplay hit clean coz the idea is really good lol. It's just too much of a stretch.
Phal, wording and execution are tight, concept is really just okish but it hits and spun just fresh enough to not feel too played.
This is actually close, good concept vs good execution.
Vote Phal.
The Last Level
phal was very safe here, everything was fine, connections good, just a very safe bar that could never be hated
fresh came with very cool wp and the concept is dope, and for that he got this one for me
v/ fresh
heavyweight champ spar here boys. I like that wordplay Fresh, it was nice and never saw it before so props, creative and its not a stretch to me imo, pronounces just fine. Phal you took a pretty good concept and executed it very well- i think what i liked the most was the way you structured your bar in terms of set up and flow overall. my Vote going to Phalanx on this one
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Originally Posted by 3viction
V Phal both were decent,phal executed better simple but effective concept