fresstyle

[Slave]

My flow sick, I shine bright like a glow stick.
Always strapped with that glock, nigga jus check the clock.
Ya times running out, you dry like a desert drout.
Money tall like a sky scraper, ya bitch look at me, then back at you like see ya later.
She no a kid like me is ballin, when I come through ya city shot callin.
I keep that lean in my cup, and that green in my blunt.
So high a nigga dreamin, make ya blind the way my grill gleamin.
Now imma let you all off easy, this time and this time only
Now go run and cry to ya one and only homie.

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[Know-It-All]

Two links of feedback or I will close this.

[Slave]

Two links of feedback or I will close this.

I added the links.

[Know-It-All]

Thank you for adding links brother as for the piece it was okay for a keystyle and you have some good multis just find yourself a good topic and write a good piece I think you have potential to be good at this.

[Slave]

Thank you for adding links brother as for the piece it was okay for a keystyle and you have some good multis just find yourself a good topic and write a good piece I think you have potential to be good at this.

Thanks man that means a lot. And this was jus off the top of the dome, I feel if I sat there and put some time into a rap I could be way better.