the new me

[THE DOPED MALB]

Through every negative I encounter in my life/
I WILL go past that obstacle in order 2 survive/
Ive experienced a minor session in depression in the past/
But at last that problem is something I have surpassed/
Depression sure did make an impression in my life 4 a while/
But fuck that shit 4 once ive began 2 smile/
I don’t even want 2 eliminate my mother anymore/
I don’t even hate her like I did so aggressively before/
Ive accepted the fact that my father and brother r dead/
I don’t even dream about my mother and bloodshed/
Im now using my brain, ive survived the pain/
That I once did contain but these scars on my wrists still remain/
They maintain just 2 remind me what ive come through/
Shit I was so mentally ill my life was something which I did review/
But now im enjoying living every day all the time/
Because now honestly I can say I believe I define devine/

[The End]

I didn't read your poem but your name is horrible.

[Civilized Rebel]

The Dope Malb, it's been a long time. Glad to see you're back.

Welcoming aside, you've dropped some great literary work. You came off with a lot of those rhymes you have. Proper structure and thoughts that kept on the subject matter.

I can tell this is a pheonix kind of peice. Y'know, rising of rebirth. Out of sorrow comes brighter hope, yadda yadda and all that. Much love, dude.

~Shalom~

[ExceedinglyMachoRapper]

11 posts in a year and a half.........

[Split-eyez]

great piece
I felt it... really deep and filled with emotions
great structure, flow, and wordplay... keep dropping shit like this and keep writing straight from the heart.

nice drop

peace

[THE DOPED MALB]

Originally posted by The End
I didn't read your poem but your name is horrible.

atleast my names origional

Originally posted by Bazzy
11 posts in a year and a half........

incorrect ive been here alot longer than that newbe
and yea ive only got 11 posts 2 my name this time
but i aint got 2 free post like u and that other joke 2
make urselfs look like VETS because u have a high post count
so please grow up an get a life


now thanx Necromancer 4 actually reading my piece and dropping ur 4ts on it its appericiated

[Tourniquet]

'Through every negative I encounter in my life/
I WILL go past that obstacle in order 2 survive/'

It was only upon reading this a third time that I realised you had capitalised the WILL in the second line, and suddenly I read it differently. Almost felt like I was peeping on someones inner strength, it became a conversation with yourself and not so much the reader- Your telling yourself this, and Im glad to see that by the end of the poem it looks like you believe.

Coupled with a great flow, and rhyming without feeling like it was forced - I really like this work.. Kudos~

[Varentao]

Quite a personal piece. Using a raw stance to bring forth the purity of the 'situation'. Especially the current mind set.

I would say at times the way the flow and simplicity fluctuated was a bit off. But then i guess that's part of the effect. The personal side taking over the piece in a sense.

The ending was understood, but still a bit unusual "I believe i define divine" - dunno if that is a blunt self analysation looking at a certain amount of relieved narcyism or maybe something else. You know, to put emphasis on how your life and mind is now more calm. Or just a wrong choice of words...

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