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    Behind The Solar Walls

    I was sitting in a chair staring at a blank page,
    When I felt an earthquake come and engage...
    It was late, people were sleeping and my mind was seaping...
    I was reading... and then came later in the evening.
    I felt it, I knew it, maybe it's the music...
    Or maybe it's the fact that I'm under the influence.
    I ran out of the house and saw the sky swallow it whole,
    Which was a dark purple color, the sun began to explode.
    My mind was about to blow, women were screaming,
    There was no light whatsoever, I wanted to know the meaning.
    If this was the revelation, people were going insane,
    Planes were falling out of the sky, people began to faint.
    Trains collided on the tracks, crashing, I felt some sort of force,
    People died instantly, I was forced for the last resort.
    When I immediately evacuated my house I saw a sight of figures,
    I became sicker and vomited, then a light flickered...
    It got darker as zombies were falling out of the sky, shining,
    There was no more darkness, and I heard no more cries whining...
    Everything vanished immediately as I felt gravity shift,
    My heart was no longer beating as I felt depravity lift.
    Death clocks were no longer ticking... no longer ringing,
    I felt a force and saw a powerful light of a higher being.
    I was seing visions of memories, as glass began to shatter,
    The houses exploded with fire after, I got higher up to the ladder.
    Have you ever felt a regret so tough within you?
    It creeped through your mind so much, or it begins to...
    To the point to insanity... it had all left me as of now,
    Every memory gone, every darkness so vile.
    Gone... far away... and as I walked through that door,
    I had gone somewhere unknown, my physical being was no more...
    Last edited by TNE; June 12th, 2006 at 10:13 AM

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    nice

    i cant break it down cause it was all nice

    nice mettas..multies..creativity..vocab
    and............................................... .................................flow

    over all i will rate it.....8.4/10

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    Thanks a lot, man. Uppin'.
    R.I.P. Big Proof

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    very different topic pretty interesting

    this showed some nice creativity

    good strucutre and flow and rhymes

    good imagery..descent vocab

    good peice overall.

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    Aight, thanks. Uppin'.
    R.I.P. Big Proof

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    Uppin'.
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    Uppin'.
    R.I.P. Big Proof

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