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    Off My Chest

    I See Dudes Fightin, Last Week They Was Pals
    People Blastin Off K's Like We Livin' In Israel
    Feds Bustin Kids For Dealin And Puffin Green
    While The NHS Is Crowded With Pregnant Teens
    Blair Puttin In Laws To Try And Control Us
    He Didn't Do Anythin, When They Blew Up A Whole Bus
    Now Look At The Situation We Got Ourselves In
    Brits On The Sharp End Like We Ridin A Pin
    Religion Non-Existant, There Is No Sin
    Government Already Beat Us, Coz We Cant Win
    Jus Look How Its Goin' When We Slowin It Down
    Wearin A Frown, Immigrants Make Us Look Like Clowns
    Its Peoples Fault, They Say Their Luck Shit
    I Wanna Pull Out An Eagle And Jus Say Fuck It
    I Wanna Have Fun And Drops Tonnes
    On You Fake Ones
    I'm Findin Life Hard Like Single Mums
    I'm A Parent And My Rap Is My Only Son
    I Wanna Get Away But Theres Jus No Where To Run
    The Rhymes My Child, Wish I Had An Abortion
    Coz Everytime I Write All I See Distortion
    So Many Problems And No Compatibility
    The Sea Is Rough Theres No Tranquility
    All The Weight I Got, I Feel Resposilibty
    If I Don't Clear My Head, Its Gonna End Up Killin Me
    Stuck Like, Hyperdermic Needles Straight In My Arm
    The Storms Been Ragin For Years Wheres The Calm?
    Coz I'll Turn Around And Shuve The Thoughts Staight In Ya Face
    Lookin Embarrased Like A Lawyer Losin' An Easy Case
    I'll Be In And Out Fast, Blood I Won't Leave A Trace
    Your Slurrin Your Words, Ya Startin To Sound Like Mase
    Switch The Tempo Up So That You Cant Keep Pace
    Don't See Life As A Journey, See It As A Rat Race
    Whatever You Can Get, And Where Ever You Can Get It
    Finish Line Is Miles, Don't Blame Me, I Dint Set It
    I Cant Comprehend About Marshall Losin' His Best Friend
    If That Happend To Me My Life Would Be At End
    I'd Take A Gun And Put It Straight To My Temple
    I'd Pull The Trigger And Make Everythin' Simple
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    The rhymes were very basic, the topic is very played out as well. I would recomend working on your structure. The flow is off in places which makes the read un smooth. Keep elevating.
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    The rhymes were simple, but the wordplay was okay. Structure was decent. The flow was off in some places. The ending was great, but the intro of it seemed more like the middle. Keep practicing and elevating.
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    thanks blood
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