A day in the life of a circus clown..(topical no-show verse)

[The Vortex]

I was bankrupt so i joined the circus for the summer fanfare
There goes my image wearing orange clogs and bushy green hair
Hey folks it’s me Mr fucking Happy smile painted on my face
Somebody slaps me round the head when i step onto the stage
You might think im joyful but you don’t bloody know the half
Depressed as shit and I’ve gotta make these little bustards laugh
Bowtie spinning, eyes bloodshot; cocaine stuffed up my red-nose
Line snorting to help me cope with repeating all these wet jokes
I approached the audience: “hey-kids you wanna see some magic?”
They all screamed “YES HAPPY”… then i pulled a bunny rabbit
Out off my ass; while the crowd gasps in complete astonishment
A grandma in front-row has heart seizures from the excitement
When i boot poor bunny backstage all covered in excrement
I hate animals…… so i couldn’t care for shit if his legs broke
My sidekick Bozo joins the show and splatters me with Egg-yolk
Everyone-else thinks this funny but i wanna cut the punks throat
Staggering left: i vomit whisky and move on to juggling tricks
A wooden skittle hits my head: then i collapsed suffering fits
Flat on my back…… blowing kisses at the circus ballerina
As these four fat dwarfs -carry me on stretcher from the arena
That’s all from your beloved clown goodbye ladies and gentleman’s
Next, some fat stinky elephants will entertain your attendance.

[The Vortex]

links
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=243081
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=242854

[The Vortex]

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[~flOw cOnductOr~]

lol dis made me laugh the first 8 lines were very well stuctured and humurous i thought the subject was original and u made it easy to picture in my head. the piece was built up well and brought down well as in good beggining and good end the middle was good too.flow was ok couldnt really spot any faults overall a entertaining read i thought

fav line: You might think im joyful but you don’t bloody know the half
Depressed as shit and I’ve gotta make these little bustards laugh

[The Vortex]

thanks for the look out bruv
glad i could be of entertainment to at least one person


sure is sleepy round here
smph

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[warchild]

Vor you know my style is crazy so i had to be feeling this piece lol.
The concept was mad strange but was still an entertaining read the part about the dude pulling a rabbit out of his ass was really funny suprsised i aint thought of some dumb shit like that to say. The imagery and vocab matched well but you didnt go over the top with it and you didnt really need to.
The flow was decent but again the concept probably stopped you from going over the top with it. I liked the piece but i couldnt really leave a lot of feed because the concept of the piece was just a funny story and it made me laugh so i think your missions accomplished.
Can you return the feed on my new Om:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=244305

[Br3ndy da killa]

iight dis was funne especially with the grandma having the eizure that was fukin funne as heel u were stuk on da subject no doubt about that i liked it cuz thats something very funne u wont see at a circus ur structure was great on it i liked it a lot and ur style was really nice in dis peace my fav line is:

approached the audience: “hey-kids you wanna see some magic?”
They all screamed “YES HAPPY”… then i pulled a bunny rabbit
Out off my ass; while the crowd gasps in complete astonishment
A grandma in front-row has heart seizures from the excitement

[The Vortex]

thanks good looking out yo