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    Deep in my heart

    Deep inside my soul my heart seems to resemble
    These invisible tears that I feel drip down my face
    To place my mind in a position of tough conditions
    To depress me and access the world I vision
    The world I imagine aint television or religion
    But a collision of many things from different directions
    Its a war everyday between my heart and brain
    Cause when that shit starts my eyes begin to rain
    To maintain my conscience and contain the nonsense
    Its the pain when permanent and insane when intense
    Cause shit is dense in the presence of thought
    The sense of the essence cant be bought or taught
    Everythings sugarcoated and commercialism rises
    Cause this world visions cataclysm at high prices
    CD's, DVD's, and games inflate in this system
    Bling shines like a prism so I speak my words of wisdom
    Shit then fucks a victim of this worlds insecurities
    To stabilize the ability to move on from a hearts injury
    Comin from the tear in me is the purity of my personality
    Many inquires to decide whats best for me is my civility
    Anger irritates me to agitate but endurance slows my agility
    To show my ability is killin me when the skills compete
    Problems never complete and hard to defeat but easy to retreat
    GOD still and always will remain discrete to many people
    To try to find answers by using lyrical lethal
    Heart in me is hard to repair, when thoughts integrate
    But its not like we care, when people dont appreciate

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

    - Martin Luther King Jr.


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    Last edited by 2hot2handle; July 5th, 2005 at 02:37 PM

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

    - Martin Luther King Jr.


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    That's a tight verse, and good use on the words. The part about being overcharged for luxurious things like CD's and Dvd's is some true shit.

    However, that doesn't seem like it would sound good on wax. Try doing some more cocky type rhymes, or if you want to go deep on some spiritual or political, then do something everyone can relate to. Peace

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    initial reaction= phew! flow is tite with the rhyme scheme...

    Everythings sugarcoated and commercialism rises
    Cause this world visions cataclysm at high prices
    nice
    those words rhyming around civility were a bit of a mouthful...i feel this would have to spit at a fast pace most of the way...Deep breath.







    Shit then fucks a victim of this worlds insecurities
    damn!....yeah

    hectic!!!!!!!!!!!
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    The flow in this was real nice.. The emotion was real soild and I feel the content of this piece.. I cant relate because I feel differently.. But keep writing..

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    I Thought this was a decent piece. You got your point across real good, and I was feelin the flow of it. It wasnt anything spectacular, but it was fun to read. Good work, keep the shit commin...

    (plz return the favor and peep "How 'Bout You" in my sig)
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    SEE THINGS THROUGH MY EYES... SEE THROUGH MY LYRICS

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    SS LEAGUE

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    wow, thanks for the feedback guys, i was afraid it might get slept on. Thanks, more feedback please.

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    That Was A Tight Flow It Had Good Structure And It Had A Stronge Message This Would Be Something That I Will Put In Audio It Was Hot.....................
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    i dont have any audi stuff though and uppin again thanks.

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    yo i liked this piece... had a very nice flow to it and the vocab was great, the topic was good and the rhyme was great....the structure was strong also, i liked it.

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    uppin again

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    damn du'... its getting harder and harder to find things wrong on this site anymore...again another great piece.. almost poetic in a sense.. loved it..by the way... i like the mlk quote... my favorite is "If a man hasn't discovered something that he will die for, he isn't fit to live" he knows the streets...

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    uppin again thanks so far

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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    "I look to a day when people will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character."

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