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    educating me? (spoken word)

    Play with poetry to pour flow from me
    fortunately my charm arms me luckily
    true im stuck standing like glued shoes
    a dirty dog lost without like blues clues
    never cut class like scissors, not that kid
    but school grim, so I ditch n call it a trim
    I don’t front
    yo I place history books in my forefront
    to make sure my eyes stayed covered up
    what? Mc2? Does that mean it’s a battle
    dog, understand my baby brain is rattled
    we get herded like cattle, move on a bell
    explain why when my stock goes up I sell
    hell this worlds cold making me feel old
    call the cops cuz my innocence was stole
    description fittin’ moldy text and portables
    gloomed rooms with asbestos growing so
    I cant deny lunch lines pressed ass to thigh
    hit the trough for slop of disease piled high
    and again the bell tolls, and we begin to roll
    not out but over, for trolls of academic goals
    whoa, hold up, stop think and correct this
    stand and speak over the liars, address it
    kids get limited responsibility including
    lemme see, well speech, nope pardon me
    clothing, sorry another fallacy of our being
    well certainty there’s something that’s free
    an education is what it must be, now I see
    how did it escape me, im tired probably
    most likely dreaming, school is great, agreed
    no what the problem be, oops it slipped
    that wasn’t proper of me I’ll close my lips
    seal em like a ziplock, remove my wristwatch
    turn my hat around so I don’t get caught
    I ought to flip my shit cuz 8 ball is gangsta
    so next week I will wear jesus and the manger
    avoid danger, by studying my mathematics
    add n pull up my pants so Im no crack addict
    take a pen to blend a and b to get my answer
    knowing about pheno and genotypes matters
    hold my hand high in the sky to relieve my blatter
    fail or graduate, I guess I choose the latter
    even after schools pained me like a catheter
    I push on
    log logs of journals to comfort my internals
    just to get pissed like the administrators urinal
    I’ve heard it yo, and no im not talking duncans
    it’s slang and to me it actually means somethin’
    you buggin’, but not like cars or beatles though
    but with bass akwards advice like school=cash flow
    I know the real reality lies in lies of government
    but like micheal jacksons son its not uncovered yet
    blanketed truth is obtuse, but shallow lies are acute
    like hugh who granted sex with that stripper who
    was brown sugar it seemed, but wasn’t equal
    and sin ahmen its bitter in pains revolving sequel
    and this world is nuetral and not even sweet
    I stand minus liberty with defeat feet deep in deceit
    I tried kinda
    but not really at all, I just called my cause
    lost, drunk up pain like alcohol on gauze
    saw stars in the sky to guide my hopes
    now I cry on the stars on the flag to cope
    patriotism transformed to symbolism
    the same way school spoke and I listened
    now I return to a more pure potent vision
    of the black ink that glistens from what I’ve written

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    God fucking damn homie this shit was nice as hell nice title also..but let me finish reading it



    yo I place history books in my forefront
    to make sure my eyes stayed covered up
    what? Mc2? Does that mean it’s a battle
    dog, understand my baby brain is rattled
    we get herded like cattle, move on a bell
    explain why when my stock goes up I sell
    hell this worlds cold making me feel old
    call the cops cuz my innocence was stole
    description fittin’ moldy text and portables
    gloomed rooms with asbestos growing so
    I cant deny lunch lines pressed ass to thigh
    hit the trough for slop of disease piled high


    that shit has serious emotion on it ..its like i can fell everything on it...

    i want you to type a sick girl poem for my chick if you can an how long have you been doing the poems an shit i want to get to know how ight homie


    good shit tho

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    www.theilleffect.com djb's Avatar
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    thanks man. that was the point. nice sc btw. upping for some more feedback
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    up please
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    i'm happy that someone in the crew is pushing into a new area so well, more power to us! ha. I liked the imagery you used throughout the piece, i thought it was the strongest aspect (as it should be in poetry), you had occasional multi's but they weren't necessary (rhymes aren't even nexessary). you conveyed a feeling of a kind of melancholy which kept me reading til the end. the blue's clues reference made me crack a smile. good work fam.

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    call the cops cuz my innocence was stole
    i really liked tha whole poem but this line is the one that i really liked! so good yo!
    remove my wristwatch
    turn my hat around so I don’t get caught
    I ought to flip my shit cuz 8 ball is gangsta
    so next week I will wear jesus and the manger
    avoid danger, by studying my mathematics
    add n pull up my pants so Im no crack addict
    take a pen to blend a and b to get my answer
    knowing about pheno and genotypes matters
    hold my hand high in the sky to relieve my blatter
    fail or graduate, I guess I choose the latter
    even after schools pained me like a catheter

    i really also liked this stanza also. it makes me think bout all tha thugs and gangstas out thurr who are out thurr who need or try to get an education. but, u did a real good job.~1~

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    thank you guys very much, it is appreciated
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