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    ...Mechoniod Gladiators...

    *aight*


    iv seen the battles of the future, and here is what it is
    genitics taking on the form of quadruple helix//
    differant collections of synthetic materials//
    skin tissue covering a cybergenitic realm//
    cells manipulate across a mechanical voicebox//
    amplifier's connected from da solar plexus to the fore-arm//
    needless to breathe spitting at lightspeeds//
    which might cause supercomputers processors to bleed//
    at a thousands reads, microchips producing static electricity//
    trying to pick a punchline randomly, taking various experiments//
    using scientifical mathmatical methods to pick the perfect weapon//
    taking simulations, evaulating its previous rotation//
    of thorough training which replicates the state//
    of trying to rape satan//
    takes phrases from the all time greatest//
    trying to work the calculations of what//
    made tupac and biggie famous//
    standing brainless, going decades without food for ages//
    needless to use pages, digi-equiped with wickadary spits//
    battleverses as its fists, heavy enough to codemn lisp//
    the arena's beginning musical procudure//
    have humaniods on the verge of a seizure//
    robots and flesh screaming like gladiators with ceasaur// (lol spelling)
    machine and man alike getting drunk and high//
    wasting on alchohal and diesiel//
    gates arise with the screech of weisel//
    i.r. baboon moving fuel consuming mechwarriors//
    bowing tech honours to the supercomputer battle holders//
    and all those who await, in front of the mechoniod games//
    will taste the blood - sweat - and pain...............................

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    Ipsum Provoked Images's Avatar
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    if i rated it: 7/10 because some of tha parts did not fit and there was no wordplay, only dictionary play, tha thing is u tried too hard to have advanced words, that took away from tha wordplay, hit ur head on a cloud, naomean?...

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    great vocab
    nice flow
    pretty good wordplay
    nice drop yo, i liked it
    keep droppin
    please check out my latest

    click on link in my sig

    peace!

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    thanx for the feedback, uppin

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    uppin

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    uppin uppin uppin this this this piece piece piece

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    you sacrificed flow for vocab

    ............with more flow and shit this spit would have been off the hook

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