Pour better or worse

[Spoken]

Pour better or worse



I intice myself with utter wrappings
in emotional grievance with solitude.
chants of a time echo,

tip tap....tip tap...

clanking on the obstacles in view,
abrasive pounding of cold tappings
convolute in-her-course

tip tap...tip tap...
chasing each other they race,
to see who surpasses in first
moans of joy ring...
A fool to give such problems
i lay my vows down to come forth
in happiness with you...
I feed for no other i lock my eye's
with no key to unlock them except for yours
happiest in your arms....

"Do you james take isabella to be your lawfully wedded wife,
to love and to hold, for better or worse in sickness in her health,....I DO"

She talks of such things, evolutionized to screams
shredding my heart piece by piece , karma in tenfolds
im lost, confused....
what shall i do?...what choice am i given
sucha feeling is over-rated yet subtle to many others
i love her, she loves me not...

tip tap...tip tap...

i lay in fear and in sadness, she has unlocked my eye's
corruption fills to be pollution of madness and pain
i correct my love and die...
Pour better, im worse than ever before
She clashes my heart with daggers,
dig deeper if she must...
not a word will be said, slick as can be
a moment of freedom is parched, im shackled
til next time honey...

tip tap...tip tap...

[Prince Escobar]

Well the beginning of this piece really had me confused on the first read, however as the piece goes on your direction becomes more and more clear which i liked. Your imagery was fairly good and i liked the comparison you're conveying between the rain and the relationship. All in all it was an enjoyable read man, it could have been a bit clearer and perhaps you could have changed a few wordings but i liked it none the less, 1luv.

[Spoken]

word thanks man.......woot woot!

[Jon]

at first it seemed a little foggy, if you know what i mean.. it was just like.. idk didn't really grasp my attention because i didnt quite understand where you were going with it. but when it was nearing the middle and end, i started to see what you were describing, and talking about. and when it started to clear up and i was understanding it, it was a good piece, you had good little discriptive spots in here where i was just like.. picturing it in my mind. good drop man.. keep dropping.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...on-334822.html
hit that

[Spoken]

i shall RTF.

[HighEngineChief]

This was a good piece, I like how you stole the onimonopia's idea from me though( havnt had to spell that since 4th grade si if it's wrong, tough) jk. Anyway the imgery in this was very dope, i loved your description and the way you interpeted sounds and feelings on to the page. Your content was a bit confusing but I think I got the gist of it - sappy ass love...
Anyway very good drop and a nice read

[Poeta Demonio]

Closed- too many open