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    Beyond The Sky.

    Beyond the Sky

    I stand in the bliss--I've failed perhaps once this stamina hits,
    Then the World won't adapt and collapse with the clamp of My fists,
    But I manage a glimpse at a place that's been plagued and pardoned,
    Of its wrongdoings that overshadows and fades to darkness,
    In ways I've bargained--Asked for tithes, and forgotten some,
    Even through pain I sacrificed My only begotten Son,
    But it didn't stop you none, full of selfish antics,
    So now I slowly back away from this helpless planet,
    And now we panic!--I stay in the mist never out to bother,
    Until My children finally realize they're without a Father,
    Then the World caves in to further warn their presence,
    And Good and Evil is on the verge of an Armageddon,
    Cuz I'm tired of athiests and their pompous beliefs,
    Two-faced Christians honoring me through comic relief,
    Fondling Priests touching kids, which molds into profits,
    TV Pastors with viewers putting dough in their pockets,
    All out for themselves, so I'll ignite some fear,
    But I'm so tired that I could sleep and it'll be night for years,
    I'm that powerful--And sometimes rebellious, rude,
    And make a victim out of YOU because I'm jealous too,
    Try sighing or crying that will just tempt the weather,
    Then cause a crisis all from making this one simple gesture,
    With your fate in My hand, I'm controlling your deaths,
    Can stop hearts from the thought of simply holding my breath,
    You're God given--And I'm so glad and grateful,
    But always remember: That I didn't really have to make you,
    Cuz two people were fine, I didn't have to spread it,
    But atleast after the sixth day, can I have the Seventh?
    Not asking for too much, but through insanity,
    You All stopped and dropped everything and ran to me,
    The War and 9/11 left you all in doubt and pain,
    Then I was again your usual household name,
    But out of vain, so I think what if I slept awhile,
    And let your sins blend in with the depth of crowds,
    Miserable lives all for those who are maliciously feeble,
    Meticulously evil and let diseases viciously eat you,
    I'm tired of forgiven, what's an old Savior to do?
    I cover My ears in hopes to miss a prayer or two,
    My eyes have seen the ending, I've blinked, I've doubted,
    But I'll give it 20 more years and I'll think about it.




    "I want to know God's thoughts... the rest are details."
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    This was deep. trying to portray God's thoughts is very impressive. I liked this alot. I've never seen an OM like this one. The imagery of the mind and world was there and I felt the emotion. I like the vocabulary and the multi;s. I think your structure could have been a little cleaner. The flow was also good. keep it up man.

    Btw, can you leave feed on the OM in my sig. It's called Crying Soul. I'm still trynna elevate.

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    Quote Originally Posted by detremental.
    This was deep. trying to portray God's thoughts is very impressive. I liked this alot. I've never seen an OM like this one. The imagery of the mind and world was there and I felt the emotion. I like the vocabulary and the multi;s. I think your structure could have been a little cleaner. The flow was also good. keep it up man.

    Btw, can you leave feed on the OM in my sig. It's called Crying Soul. I'm still trynna elevate.

    he said it all....dope shit homie..but theres still room for elevation
    The Rise And Fall Will Be My Death
    So As I Gasp For My Last Breath
    Put the Gage To My Chest
    i Gulp a Heep of Salayva In Distess
    Sound Of The Gun Cocked Wat's Next
    *Bang*
    Bullet Incarnates His Soul
    Burinin His Skin His Heart Turned Cold
    Dead In a Matter of Secounds
    MIND AND THE PEN
    Is the Greatest Weapon
    So Dont Use Gunz or Knives
    Do it If u Dont wanna Live a Life

    Made By Me

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    flo was fuckin nasty, inners were absolutely crazy as well, and it just kept on helping the flow, they were all multisyllable and intense, just sliky smooth man, saw this on rapmusic, and i left feed i think. The entire point of the story was nice too, a lot of it was basically truth. some parts were just a little boring and repetitive, overall very nice drop Ms. Nique

    hit up "this old tounge" please. thanks

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    A very strong piece. Creative topic as usual. Nice
    coverage of the conflicts between good & evil. This
    was a very nice piece niq. Strung together, well, too.
    It was like painting a picture of God and the struggles
    from then to eternity.



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    Ill shit fam, I think I got an idea for the collab. I'll hit you with it later...


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    Real Creative topic fams, also this piece was very emotinal. nice use of words, and it fitted rightin your concept. Also the flow was okay but could've been better, butthe structure wasn't alll that perfect, and some okay imagry as well...

    peep the OM in the sig fams..

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    UP!!
    Last edited by .Nique.; May 8th, 2006 at 11:47 AM Reason: cuz i wanted to
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    I pray to God hope I live in the sky
    All the folks who ever died hope they live in the sky
    Tell God, I wanna fly, let me live in the sky

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    Yo Nique, can you leave feed on the OM in my sig? It's called Crying Soul. I still think I need elevation.

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