frist time

[west beat]

i was growing up i didn't have much
only a dreams which was out of touch
out of reach that dream was to make hot beates
my dream was to get of streets


when i was growing up i didn't know what to do ?
should i stay in or drop out school ?
ma mama said i was a fool she
also said what ever you do i will support you
so i drop out about 8th grade got a job and got paid
it was only a paper round as shit as it sounds
i didn't give a fuck how cheap i sound
this shit underground

p.s this is my frist time tell wot you think

[sILLable]

pretty simple piece..you need toelevte..and you need two links to two replies youve made in open mic...or thisll get closed..keep elevatin.~1~

[west beat]

plz reply

[Sammy B]

Minimum line length is 16 lines. The vocab was way too simple. The topic has been done before you need something special to make it stand out such as wordplay. As you continue to write move into a more complex rhyme scheme.