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    ~Insanity Of One~

    {verse 1}
    I Caused A Depression, I Saw My Agression, And Aimed It At You
    A Killer In The Rise, A Killer In My Eyes, Gives Red Stains On Statues
    Cause Pain And Death, My Rein Caused Vein So Insane, Im Now The Best
    Derranged Mind, I've Arranged Time To Rhyme out Your Death
    I Spit Out Fire That Splits The Wires Of Emcees On Tight Ropes
    I Enter Gun Fights With Knives, Slice Up Lives And I Still Got High Hopes
    Im Blessed With Best Mind In Rap, My Insanity's Left Uncontrolled
    So Sick With Slick Rhymes That Come Quick And Son The Old
    To Many Hits To The Brain, So Insane, My Mind Twists Your Frame
    I Got The Rap Game On A Chain, Raps Just Another Slave In my Name
    Caused Destruction, A Multy Eruption, Makin You Think It Over
    Reverse Crimes, Emerse Lines To Turn The Drunk Sober
    I Might Write Life In Rhymes, That Bright Fights Up With Minds
    Take Time, Rethink Lines, To Make The Perfect Rappin rhyme

    SWITCH FLOW...

    {verse 2}
    the guns~reflection had a strong~affection causing~me~to~kill
    with gods~protection i wrong~objection, dodging~shit~at~will
    no turning~back, im learning~that throught this fuckin~night~mare
    live~by~the~gat~die~by~the~gat, we make a fuckin~tight~pair
    guns~and~shanks, its weapons~to~thank for these killing~sprees
    when i bursts, i spit the worst, so that bullets are filling~emcees
    i spit bars with great~thrusts, that fill cemitary graves~up
    i loaned my skills to rap, and now its time to pay~up
    im a true vet to the game, and motherfuckers don't respect~me
    i perfected~rap, and you still got the nerve to reject~me
    i did my hundred~miles~of~runnin, so i sit and smile~while~sonnin
    i dont recycle, or bite rhymes, so they say im wild~and~stunning

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    DAmn!.... that shit was pretty hot, it looks like a heap of cock cheese piled into triangular shaped pizzas, and trust me, that means it was good!. you had some nice multis, good vocab, and i was feeling the whole thing, i could actually feel a beat when i was reading it, you should record that shit if you can, it would be dope as fuck.
    good job.

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    thanks alot man... yea im tryin to get an audio up, but i aint got a mic or anything like that so im hopeless right now, ill be gettin a mic soon, so expect a audio...

    uppin for more feedback

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    uppin

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    yo this is dope
    have alot of multis wich is aways a plus.
    1 verse got sorta choppy nearing the end.
    2nd verse I was faced with the samething weak closing.
    but over all good drop.

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    thanks dude.... well see when i got to the end of those verses i was a bit rushed but thats not an excuse... i really just wanted to quickly drop some sick verses

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    nice piece man..i loved tha first verse...very dope...intricate..emotion..vocab..wordplay amd complexity..all that...i didnt care too much fpr the second verse though..not sure why...it didnt flow as well..somethings were stretched a bit...and you had a newbish way of connecting your multis...if we could understand em in your first verse with out tha little squiggley lines than its not needed in the second verse..just a thought...keep droppin and elevatin.~1~


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    alright let me tell u my thoughts
    It wuz nice i like the whole thing altogether i felt a type of rythm reading it, but i think your multis were a little out there and a little stretched
    good vocab and multis but like i said a little stretched

    you are tight man
    keep up the good work

    check out my piece, peace out

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    Its good homie...i was feelin' the flow is was sick good job dawgs..the rhyming was tight too

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    Thanks to all your feedback... during this peice i was just in the mood to throw lots of multies/rhymes so thats what i came with...

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    uppin for more feedback...

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    pretty hott

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    kk...

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