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  1. September 7th, 2004, 02:10 AM #1
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    A White page is formed
    Symmetrical yet imbalanced
    It awaits a surreal stroke
    And a hands scribbled justice

    Blackness escapes the abyss
    Tainting a once blank purity
    Literary crusades induce armies
    Dividing lines to dispute truth

    Wars tear at the worn page
    Stanzas of souls lost in conflict
    While the ink bleeds relentlessly
    Converting words to Crimson seas

    Books warrant disarmament
    Writer's in widespread disgrace
    As Black fiercly faught White
    Leaving various shades of Greys

    Whos hand will wield the pen?
    Where will the page end?
    What do you, the editor believe?
    Tell me...
    Whos writing OUR DESTINY?!
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  2. September 8th, 2004, 12:38 AM #2
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  3. September 8th, 2004, 08:11 PM #3
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    this poem actually got me thinkin about things for a little while there. i like how this was done structurally. and there was emotion in this too.... sorry i cant really give a great reply, ill edit later, i hafta go out. much love



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  4. September 8th, 2004, 11:49 PM #4
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    good piece the emotion you put forward was felt liking how you put it all together had a couple of quotes in here that really got me good i read it a couple times to get the whole effect out of it
  5. September 9th, 2004, 12:09 AM #5
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    Short and sweet shit. I like the concept alot. I've always played with a similar concept in my head for a while. Its good to see this put down nicely. Only think I didn't like was the color changing and bold. Don't know why. This was still a nice little read.

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    Wow, a very dope short piece, the imagery was very very good and the story you told was unique but easy to follow, also thought provoking as shawty b said. Its symbolism and simplicity made this a very powerful impactful piece, really enjoyed what you did with this one, do me a favor and drop on my new poem, 1luv.
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  7. September 10th, 2004, 02:14 AM #7
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    Thanks to all who replied, i appreciate it.

    Nfamous, ill be sure to check out your latest piece.


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  8. September 14th, 2004, 12:46 PM #8
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