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    MC_Merc
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    troubled

    well i was born, guess i was raised to be a gentleman
    well to my surprise i guess i'm living under them
    i live of cash that was hustled from a wannabe thug
    i was once like that muthfuka, now i'm addicted to drugs
    about a year before i got into the so called game
    people used to diss me of my ethnics and call me names
    now i rised to the place i am in now, i ain't any better
    i used to get hustled and jacked by the primes muthafucker
    now i am in peace cause the wars all over, but my faiilure
    makes me wanna die, cause all i do is cry inside, i need a savior
    i have a hard life to lead, my past comes back tryin to destroy me
    tryin to show the punk fucks from elementary that u cant kill me
    i usually have to rumble to make my point,but then why
    do they keep, commin weaker and stronger, muthafuckas die
    leave me in peace, i'm always gonna win the battle but never the war
    its me against the world, and i'm burning all closed doors,
    but you can never burn them all, 35 billion to one
    thats why i will die, and all the wannabe punks will have won

    dats my open mic can someone tell me if this was good or bad and why
    Last edited by MC_Merc; June 6th, 2004 at 11:45 AM

  2. #2
    MC_Merc
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    ello, anybody wanna say sometin?

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    i'm always gonna win the battle but never the war
    Loved this one cuz it's a sentence that i could use anytime...

    Overall liked this one, felt ya flow, rhymin was simple sometimes but good,liked the concept too, could notice it came from tha heart, you could have used a bit more emotion maybe at some points. U could have really showed us your pain, but i really liked this tough!

    Check my OM plz....

    Greetz, Jess -x-x-x

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  4. #4
    MC_Merc
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    thanks, i thought it was pretty bad. More comments please.

  5. #5
    MC_Merc
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    please take al look

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