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I Never Thought
this is some shit I just put together please leave some feed, if ya can and if ya liked it and shit thanks niggas....
I woke up and, looked next to me there she lies/
The women I'm with for my whole life my love defies/
Watching her I feel feelings I never felt before/
Then I hear some noise by my bedroom door/
My two children run in, smiles and laughter/
The diagram of an ex-thug before and after/
Just 6 years ago, I was a no good street thug/
Now instead of giving crack, all I give is hugs/
My life has changed, to the greatest extent/
To Hell, is where my ghetto life has been sent/
I am a father, a husband, and a honest living man/
I dropped the drugs and weapons, all of you can/
This is all wonderful, this is real love and power/
It's the same as the streets my reign still towers/
But, in a good way I have the respect of the house/
Now with $50 instead of coke I'll buy my lil girl a blouse/
This is un-speakable I thought this was un-reachable/
My obstacles seemed un-leapable my guns are un-keepable/
I guess that my real man finnaly decided to surface/
I Never Thought that my life, would be so perfect/
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i was feel this piece i bit
because i can relate i now have a
family and i longer do the things i
used to because of that
so nice shit 6/10
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vocab was pretty good.....rhymes wee good...multeis were greqat..i'm impressed on the complexity to this.....flow was smooth..strucutre was even......nicely done...topic was cool...i liked it..good drop..keep it up....peace
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That was tight man.
Ya really meant somethin in that.
Keep up the good work, nice vocab,
nice message. peace
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it was all good b wordplay was good the hole concept was good the multis was good to overall it was good nice piece b ight im out 1
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thanks for feed all....but can I get some real feedback...........
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this was a good piece because it speaks truth.
i believe that the power to change your life is within yourself, more importantly in the mind; in your will!
Iron Will homie, inner strength and determination.........
this was a deep piece because it reflects some of the everyday shit people deal with, but with a positivity. It all comes down to morals and values and what you really want. Really, living an honest life is better than being violent about drugs because if you believe in "Kharma", than you are a more enlightened being if you have done wrong, been punished or had some negative inspiration to repent and learn from your mistakes. You have then become more knowledgable from experience.................knowledge is king.
keep it up homie.
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.....................okay...............lets have some once again real feedback thanks
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thugz need hugz too.......lol
nah it was good though vocab and structure and ya rhymes were good
thats the life every body be shootin for
keep doin u
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...................real fucken feed....................
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keep working on your shit man